The things they carried blog response

I definitely preferred this story more than any we have read so far.  What I really liked about it was the authors use of repetition, how he used the same basic idea but in a different way each time so that the reader is able to learn more about the characters depicted in the story. This  use of carrying items as a metaphor is very effective, as it conveys a great deal in a relatively simple way. From the initial listing of physical, practical objects, which include several personal objects of each of the individually named soldiers, which illustrates a lot about the character of these me- the man who carried the bible, or the one who carried condom. The other uses of this metaphor include how they ‘carry themselves’ while in battle, and the memories the carry with them.

The other use of metaphor was the representation of civilian or ‘normal; life in the portrayal of the girl Martha. It is made clear that she is symbolic, when the central narrator decides it is because he was constantly thinking of her that caused his friend to die. The point in the story where he burns her letters- the ones that never mentioned the war- is a clear rejection of his former life.

The time jumps in this story are also an interesting feature. Events are not listed chronologically, but are only united in terms of the list of what the men are carrying.

Writing Techniques

I really enjoyed both Emergency and The Things They Carried, particularly because the writing styles used in each were so different. Emergency used a lot of dialogue which made it feel like you were present in the scene. The language used also gave you an idea of what the main character was like. Phrases like "bent over in the posture of a child soiling its diaper" (275) and its "tasted the way urine smelled" (277) are oddly descriptive sayings that a normal person would not think of. They are definitely the way a nurse thinks. It is clear that she is unphased by normal things, as she so calmly states that "around 3:30 AM a guy with a knife in his eye came in" (275). I have an aunt that is a nurse and this is exactly how she reacts to things - almost nothing can surprise her anymore.

In The Things They Carried, the language was extremely detailed. Sentences were long and descriptive, and there was almost no dialogue. At points it felt like I was reading someone's diary. I really liked how the word "carried" had so many different meanings. It could refer to emotions, drugs, a body, a "grandmother's distrust for the white man" (367), condoms, a diary, and rock, comic books, etc. The list goes on and on. The language was very dense and heavy, like how I imagine constantly being surrounded by death and violence would feel. One particular line that stuck out to me was "And they dreamed of freedom birds" (382). These men dream of being free, living life without the fear of dying, and being with those who they love. It was written in its own single line, which I believe added to its dramatic effect.

11/13/14 Writing Techniques

Emergency by Denis Johnson was filled with dialogue, imagery, and dark humor. Starting from the first page to the last, the story is mostly told through dialogue, it gives us a good feeling of the characters. Even the last sentence is dialogue. Georgie says "I save lives" when Hardee asks him what he does for a living. This was a really strong ending because it shows us how Georgie really feels about his career, and he is proud of what he does. The imagery is also a very important part of this short story. We can imagine the grotesque image of Terrence Weber having a knife in his eye that was placed there by his wife. The imagery really makes one feel like he or she is there with the characters, quietly experiencing everything they do. The dark humor is my favorite aspect of the story. Georgie's character really adds to the mass of it. He pulls out knives nonchalantly and doesn't remember the patient afterwards. He gives the author a nice dose of sass as well. The sarcasm, knives, and dead bunnies really add a nice humorous feel to the story. Although I feel like the story was a bit fast-paced and sort of all over the place, I still believe it is a great narrative.

Short Story Techniques

The short story, “Emergency” Denis Johnson uses two distinctive techniques to lay out the story for his readers. Johnson creates a narrator who is a drug user and works in a hospital, which makes him an attention grabbing character. The other character, Georgie, is just as interesting and also a pill-popping drug user. These characters are so random with what they see, say, and do, that it is baffling as a reader. Without diving deeper into the text, this story is just insane. Johnson uses what I would call abstract imagery, unknowing what’s real and what’s not. For example, the character Georgie is not hurt or disgusted by the terrible circumstances of the rabbit he accidentally ran over. Instead, he finds an enormous desire to care for the baby bunnies that the rabbit was impregnated with. Everything seems like a hallucination, but has an underlying truth of how life works.

In “The Things They Carried,” the story seems to be more genuine because of the dialogue. Grammar is not taken into consideration with casual cursing and broken English. Tim O’ Brien breaks into his characters minds with what they desire and fantasizes about, like how Jimmy Cross feels for Martha. As a reader I was able to easily tap into how the soldiers felt, like the guilt and pain they had after the death of Kiowa. Tim O’Brien writes with a descriptive flow. His written language is a strong technique. He also keeps a repetitive theme. He brings up the "things carried" (which some could be forms of symbolism) and then listing the weight of those things more then once. 

The Things They Carried

My favorite thing about “The Things they Carried” is the extreme use of details. I love how in the description of the items that the soldiers carried, the items revealed character details and different personalities. As the author lists different items, he goes into stories. I also like the constant contrast between strong and weak. Lieutenant Cross, as a soldier, is supposed to be weak; yet, when he is weak, he and his team suffer- same for Ted Lavender. I loved how the soldiers didn’t just carry things, but also carried each other, as well as infections, lice, and ringworms. The author mentions how the soldiers carried the “burden of being alive,” which encompasses things- not just their items, but the difficulties and complexities of life. So in a sense, the items symbolize the obstacles human encounter. Yet at the end, when Cross burns the letters from Martha, we realize that the things don’t matter. 

The Things They Carried

Though it wasn't my favorite short story we've read so far (that would probably be "Emergency" just because it was a interesting read and because Georgie is such a fun, unique character), "The Things They Carried" definitely left an imprint on my mind - nothing really mind-blowing per se, but something you just can't stop thinking about. All the rich, gritty detail with which Tim O'brien describes Vietnam  and the pounds of weight that the men carry make the pages physically seem heavier. The way O'brien presents the story reminded me of Kurt Vonnnegut's repeated phrase "So it goes." from Slaughter-house Five. The mentality that that was just the way it was and there's no way to change it. "Over and over - there it is, my friend, there it is - as if the repetition itself were an act poise, a balance between  crazy and almost crazy...because Oh yeah, man, you can't change what can't be changed, there it is, there it absolutely and positively and fucking well is" (380-381). The enormous weight the men carry is also outweighed by the emotional baggage they have to lug throughout the war. Lieutenant Jimmy Cross's unrequited love for Martha is painfully doubled by the guilt he bears for putting that hopeless love before the men he has to care for. All the random things the men carry, like Rat Kiley's comic books or Henry Dobbins's pantyhose, serve as ways for the men to continue having an idea of the civilian world with which they have lost touch. I think my favorite line in the entire story is the short sentence on page 372: "They all carried ghosts." The men carry vestiges of what they once were, and, if they ever go back to their old lives, it will never be as they once were.

Emergency

For this, my final blog post, I will be talking about Emergency. I'll go over the writing techniques that I liked, and why I loved the story. Enjoy.

One of my favorite parts of Emergency was the creative use of flashbacks. In a cliche story, a flashback might come during a time of the main character's realization that something from his past is triggering something in his future. A martial arts master might remember some particular thing about his training while in the final moment of his greatest battle. Bullshit like that. But in Emergency, the flashbacks were scattered all over the story in strange places that didn't really have much to do with the story until the final flashback (which still didn't really have that much to do with the story). It's difficult, sometimes, to even tell where the story is heading, and whether it's in a flashback or in the present. I like that a lot.

I also liked the character development a lot, because it threw me off guard. When we're first introduced to Georgie as the orderly who is scatterbrained and always stealing pills, we get the sense (because of the way the main character talks about him) that the main character is NOT like Georgie. But later in the story, we find out that the main character is pretty much exactly like Georgie. And throughout the story, we find out that Georgie might not be as incompetent as he seems, and may have a gift for surgery/"saving peoples' lives."

In conclusion, this is the worst, most poorly thought-out ending to a blog post that I could've ever thought of. But maybe it's kind of clever. I don't know.

Emergency and The things we carried

"Emergency" succeeded in developing character through the use of dialogue.  This story created its characters with snippets of dialogue, followed by quick descriptions that put such a clear image in my head of that portrayed character, especially Georgie.  From the line, "there's so much goop inside of us, man", to when he pulls the knife out of the Terrence Weber's eye without even noticing, the reader gets a good depiction of who Georgie is.  By the end of the book, the reader understands that Georgie is not a try-hard, but a very caring, brave, and all around good person.

"The things we carried" was very clever in the way it was written, but also very depressing.  I am currently reading "Blood Meridian" by Cormac McCarthy, so i'm about to overload on depressing war literature, but I saw many similarities between these writers.  They both use lots of descriptive run on sentences, although O'Brien's were much easier to read, given that I was not reaching for the thesaurus at least three times a page.  I perceived "the things we carried" like a stream of consciousness, and besides Jimmy Cross, the characters were not exactly described individually in great detail, but more so as one pack of people.  Unlike "Emergency", where there were less characters, but more focus on development.

The Things They Carried

Tim Obrien's "The Things They Carried" is written in the direction of a collection of short stories or a stream of consciousness both representing the horrors of the Vietnam War, as well as the identity and life experiences of each soldier. The setting of course takes place in a war zone however Obrien is careful to dive into the lives of several solider characters. The details go from distant memories, to wishful thinking (Jimmy Cross' infatuation with a college girl named Martha), as well as tiny details of what each soldier brings with them on their dangerous journey. Most of the time Obrien describes these items in simply a bland, materialistic way; however there is also an underlying meaning behind them which may make an allusion to the title "Things They Carried." The things they carry can represent both fragments of their former selves before being conformed to warfare, and stripped down to a uniform and a gun, as well as burdens they may carry with them. These burdens may be a result of what happened in their pasts or past regrets, or they could be burdens of warfare, and traumatizing events that most likely took place within the jungles of Vietmam during such a bloody war. Overall Obrien's writing techniques revolve mostly around a sort of stream of consciousness narrative while revolving around the lives, emotions, and pasts of several soldiers, that are most likely designed to become relatable to the reader.

Denis Johnson's Emergency

Denis Johnson's "Emergency" is primarily dialogue-driven which complements the fast-paced nature of the story. Since it is situated in an emergency room, it makes sense that the plot progresses quickly, and allowing conversation to carry the story is the most effective way to do so. This device also lends a face-paced sense of immediacy to the storyline, and therefore allows the reader to become convinced and engrossed in the story more easily. Whenever Johnson does interject, he writes in first person and adapts a casual dialect that allows the piece to be conversational and again complements the immediacy of the story. He also emphasizes the episodic nature of the environment he is writing about by jumping from scene to scene, again, adding to the immediacy.

Emergency

One technique evident within the story "Emergency" is the use of dialogue. The dialogue within the text is very prevalent and functions in multiple ways including creating a scene and revealing character. For example when Georgie and the narrator are talking following Georgie's removal of the knife from the man's eye, Georgie's responses are very cool and relaxed, "'How's the guy doing?' I asked 'Who?' Georgie said". Georgie's indicated to the reader that Georgie was unfazed by the action of removing a knife from someone's eye, this spoke loudly about his character revealing things such as; he's not squeamish, he's brave, he's one to act then analyze. All of these things are revealed through the short phrase "Who".
The author also uses dialogue to create a scene which adds momentum to the story. This is best exemplified when examining the scene where Georgie and the narrator run over the rabbit and then discover its babies. This scene is almost completely dialogue but by inserting phrases "It's getting late, let's get back to town." and "We can't go on I don't have any headlights." Both of these phrases exemplify how the author uses dialogue to describe an issue which in turn creates the next scene for the story. This makes the story flow together very nicely and allows it to move in a way which does not feel forced.
A final technique used within the story is summary.  The author uses summary to describe the scenes, but keeps said summaries relatively short. This works effectively because the readers are then offered some contextual description without getting lost in long, irrelevant descriptions. One place where I think the author achieves this seamlessly is the summary preceding the rabbit scene, "After awhile you forget its summer. You don't remember what morning is". While concise, these two sentences describe both the season, and also enlighten the reader to the feelings of the narrator.

Blog 4: Workshop

     The best part about being workshopped, was receiving constructive criticism. It was interesting to hear what others had to say in regards to my poem. The difficult part about being workshopped was receiving conflicting advice. It was confusing to hear one person offer a suggestion, and then another person say otherwise. Being workshopped is such a humbling experience- it is a reminder that writing is a process and is never done perfectly the 1st time. 
     To workshop was totally different because I was the one doing the critiquing. I know people, often times, take their work personally. Knowing that people can be sensitive about their work, it was pretty uncomfortable to have to offer suggestions and/or critique the poems. But as the saying goes, 2 heads are better than 1. And even better than 2 heads? 14! It was wonderful to collaborate as a group to help contribute to the masterpieces of one another. 
     It is difficult trying to decide how much I should change and/or edit the poem based on suggestions, while remaining true to my original context. It also difficult changing the lines and/or stanzas in ways that make sense to others. So many times I have a hard time conveying my thoughts into actual words. 

Workshop review

I found workshop to be a really fun, positive experience and a great tool in my writing. It was really great to get such positive feedback from the class. I'm not sure anyone notices, but it made me tear up a little.

One of the most difficult aspects was not being allowed to speak or answer the questions or comments people made in the course of the discussion, but just sitting back and listening to the ideas and critiques were having was an interesting experience. Some people had some conflicting ideas on what to change/ expand on, which  was interesting to think about. All the comments were very helpful, and I paid particular attention to the classes critiques on possible changes in the form and grammar. I actually did end up taking quite a bit of it into consideration when I re edited the poem again.  Even reading the poem aloud to the class helped in this, as poetry tends to sound different when spoken.

Overall it was such an enormously beneficial experience and it really helped. I am not ashamed to say I went home and re read over all the lovely things people said in their comments, grinning all the while.

Workshop

Workshop was better then I expected it to be. Honestly, I was nervous to have my poem critiqued. I was worried and unsure how to react to the criticism. Confrontation is not my forte. So, when my time came and I read my poem aloud, I was surprised by the responses I got from my classmates. Every part of my feedback was constructive and useful. I enjoyed it more then I thought I would.  It was cool when my own concerns about the poem were shared among the class. This gave me a chance to hear some helpful opinions on how to improve my piece.

The one thing I love about poetry is that you can read a poem and take what you want out if it, especially if its unclear on what it is about. A lot of the responses I got were “I’m not sure what its about, but I love the way it sounds” or “Its mysterious and I like it, it could really be about anything.”

In particular, someone said it was delicate; kind of like a song. This was a really important response for me. That is exactly what I was trying to go for when I wrote my poem. I wasn't looking for people to completely understand where I was coming from, I wanted to leave room for imagination. I appreciated everything that was said in workshop. I can only hope my comments on others poems are as helpful and useful as everyone else's were for myself.

In turn, I am grateful for having the opportunity to be work-shopped. I now understand what AG meant when she said it can be “addicting” It’s a weird thing to be thankful for, but I am! I'm currently working on rewriting my poem and I cant wait to re-share it with everyone.

Workshop Reflection

I have done a workshop once before. It was senior year of high school, I think, in my writing class. We workshopped short stories.

God damn, that workshop was not even real.

I learned almost nothing from that workshop. No one had any criticisms. No one had any thoughts about form, sentence structure, or grammar (the easiest thing to have thoughts about). If anyone did say anything, it was probably along the lines of "It was good" or "I liked it." I think Mr. McQueary probably shared my frustration with the class.

This workshop was the polar opposite, and it's probably because everyone who is in the class wants to be there, has a vested interest in creative writing, and was not forced to sign up for the class. I received criticism, praise, and analysis from my peers that helped me think of revisions and improvements before the workshop was even over. If anyone was critical, they were not malicious. If anyone was congratulatory, they were sincere.

Additionally, by being forced to read my poem in front of others, any delusions about its quality had to be swept away. And that's good; delusions about its quality had to be swept away. And that's good; delusions about the quality of your writing are bad. I think when poems are workshopped, it forces the author to humble him/herself and come down to earth. Someone who thought their poem was deep and meaningful might realize in a workshop that it was actually just hoity toity bullshit.

Not that anyone's poem was like that...

Workshop

Workshop was a very surprising experience for me to say the least. I have never much been bothered by other people's commentary on my life, whether said commentary regards me personally or academically. That's why I was surprised when workshop made me so nervous.  Throughout the workshopping of my poem, I found myself extremely tense. Not on the fact that I was being evaluated but because I was unable to offer any sort of explanation for my poem. It was unique to have to hold a certain confidence that your work will be able to stand on its own two feet. Being able to explain and defend your work when presenting it is a much different experience than having to offer something which you feel confident is transparent to your reader.
Another surprising thing about workshop for me is how much I thoroughly enjoyed helping my peers in the editing process. I found great joy from gaining an understanding of everyone's pieces and helping them prepare another draft. Analyzing the brilliant works of my peers and being able to offer assistance for their structure, wording, or even just a compliment enlightened me to the unique perspective I have to offer as a writer. I have found that I truly enjoy writing as a whole, not just the finished product but also the process of procuring something to be proud of.  This experience has inspired me to attempt to become involved in publishing, on both sides of the concept.
Finally, this experience in workshop has opened my eyes to the possibility of becoming published. I didn't imagine that publishing was such a tangible idea; I had always assumed that it instead was this impossible dream. Overall, I think that this workshop experience has been immeasurably beneficial to me as a writer.

Workshop Reflection

Workshop gives us an opportunity to get thorough feedback from our classmates on our work, which we don't get to do in many of the other classes we take. The result of revising our work with the help of our classmates will surely be great narratives. Workshop has taught me that the reader's interpretation of your work can sometimes be even better, or different, than your own. Overall, I believe that workshop has been a great experience and I look forward to seeing how all my classmates revise their works based on the feedback given in class.

poem workshop

I really enjoyed the workshop experience. At first I was a little apprehensive to have to read aloud in front of so many people, but having a bit of previous practice when we read in class sometimes definitely helped. I found it kind of funny listening to the class try to decipher peoples’ poems and to look at the face of the poet who so desperately wanted to blurt out what it was really about but had to wait until the end. Hearing so much good feedback definitely helps with confidence when writing. I also really liked the fact that people actually gave good constructive feedback that is beneficial to our work, rather than just saying nice things so they do not hurt anyone’s feelings.

When I first finished my poem I did not think there was much more I could do to change it, but from the class discussion I got so many insightful ideas about how to better change words and phrases that I think it really took my poem to a new level. I also found it really helpful to actually read my work aloud because when you hear it spoken from your lips rather than just in your head it is easier to point out which parts need to be worked on more and which parts work really well. I also like the fact that the whole class reads over / edits our work, rather than just having it edited by one peer because you get so many different ideas and feedback to work with. I finally see what Professor Groner meant by the fact that workshopping can be addicting – doing it once just doesn’t feel life enough!

Workshop

Workshop has been such a helpful experience. It's less intimidating that I initially imagined it would be because we're all vulnerable together and share a same purpose: improving both our own work and the work of others. I've appreciated everyone's honesty and feedback thus far because everyone has come to class with such good intentions and every suggestion comes from such a genuine place. Everyone has been considerate and respectful throughout the process.

At the time I submitted my poem, I didn't think there was much work I could do to improve it. I was content with the piece as it was. The problem is is that I couldn't see the piece beyond my own limited vision of it. It was necessary to have an audience —particularly a vocal audience — willing, not only to read the piece, but to honestly come forth and point out what was working and what wasn't with it.

It was refreshing to read my own work from another's perspective. It breathed fresh life into it and I was able to see it in all its potential. Workshop has been invaluable thus far. I do hope we take more time to do similar sort of critiques throughout the rest of the semester.

workshop

Workshop is a good way to help the students critique their writing.  It is very helpful for the author to hear a collective of thoughts and critiques from many different people, in order to figure out what problems in their poem really need work.  Everyone is very respectful to each other and wants their fellow students to succeed.  It is nice to hear compliments about your poem, as well as what could be changed.

One problem I faced is that I'm not very good at critiquing other people's work.  Unless it is something very evident, I feel weird changing or editing someone else's piece.  It comes from their mind and it is their words, and I'm no master poet to be judging or editing something as abstract as poetry.  Maybe I just need some more practice, given that I have not written much poetry until now.

I enjoy writing poetry and reading other peoples poems.  Since I know everyone who writes these, it gives me more incentive to want to compliment them, as well as let them know what could be changed, even though I just explained that I'm not very good at that.  Still, I like workshop as an editing process and I think we should use it more. :)